Ujal
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City Sketches

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Neko
Dude, I think you killed it with this font which is too funky, as you already have a very funky outline. But in general it's really good, and we'll talk about fonts next session anyway! I'd just lose the tree, it's a bit unnecessary, and breaks the composition a bit.
Neko
Ok so now more comments... The more I'm looking at the image the more I'm convinced that you should not use the sketchy style because then it's repeating in a way a word "sketch" in the title. So it makes it too predictable. If you want to use sketches then draw some nice sketches by hand on paper and take a photo, see Paula's work and my comments, for example. In that case, you shouldn't use sketches in the title, but instead something more suggestive (and not repeating) like "My City"... whatever... Or if you want to keep the title, I would then contrast the title with very arranged composition, like for example the one below. Not very perfect rhythm, but shows a very abstract representation of the city, where foreground is warm yellow and cold blue in the back. Hm... looks like a techno album in a way... :)
Ujal
Thank you very much, I really appreciate your comments. Looking forward to the next assignment.
Neko
Great to hear! And don't look forward to the next assignment, you already have it - the UN Competition poster ! :)
Ujal
I meant I was excited about it. Already have couple of ideas about the style I may be working in. I was thinking of something like works of Kevin Van Aelst or Noma Bar.
Neko
Great examples! For work like Kevin's you will have to be working a lot in Photoshop (I'm preparing the tutorials right now!), but for Norma's work Illustrator is a perfect match!
Neko
By the way, looks like most of the photos by Kevin Van Aelst are carefully arranged photo-shoot, and not much Photoshop. If you are interested in this particular way of expression, look at works of Spanish photograph Chema Madoz. Interestingly, I think there is one exposition of his work in Segovia, I've seen the poster the other day. The new work of his, with a lot of text involved, is not so good, but the old work with carefully crafted mini-scenes by hand, these are very good and excellent style for this competition (simple, iconic idea and surgically precise minimalist execution).
Ujal
WILL DO! And yes, Ill either have to work with photos taken and edit them on photoshop or work with illustrator. I'll see what happens. Thanks for the feedback.